Don't Be a Lazy Couch Potato.

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I am still learning about complex sentences.

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Don't Be a Lazy Couch Potato.

You may think that music is better than sports well I’m here to tell you sports is much more important than music. Agree or disagree? Isn’t this what everyone wants?

Firstly I think that sports is more important than music because you can make new friends in sports. Do you make friends in music? I didn’t think so. When you make friends in sports they help you do sports they’re like your whanau( Family). For example, What if you were a shameful loner and you didn’t even have friends even your brother or sister didn’t even talk to you. When you played sports for the first time and you were popular at it you would have friends and your brother or sister liked you and they wanted to be your friend. For example, What if you went to the Olympics and you meet new people and they wanted to be your friends.  What if you had heaps of friends. Wouldn’t you like that? I know I would.

In other words sports is more important than music because you get fit and healthy and you get tons of energy. For example, Whenever I run I make tons of energy and if you run everyday then you would get tons of energy too. If you aren’t fit and healthy well here’s your chance to make that happen. You can be dieing because of obese, cancer, heart attack there are more things you can die from for not playing sports.  I think it’s tragic seeing people dying at a young age or at a old age because they never ever played sports in there life. Added to this, what if you were dieing and you family showed you sports and Boom you were as fit as you brother and sister.

Finally I think sports is way more important than music because you won’t be addicted to technology. I think it's appalling that some people don’t even know how to play sports. Don’t you think that too? Get of you lazy butt’s people and do something in your life go outside, get fresh air, play some sports. Get of that couch or bed of yours and do something make a change in your life. Unless you want to be a lazy as couch potato that was dieing because from cancer because you didn’t know how to play sports. For example, what if technology wasn’t invented  what would you do in your spare time  would you be playing sports.

In summary as I said this in the beginning  I think that sports is more important than music is you can make new friends and also meet new friends, You can be fit and healthy  also you won’t be addicted to technology.