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Friday, May 12, 2017

Happy birthday.



WALT plan our recount. We want to focus on a moment in time that will be interesting for our readers
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My next step is to have more interesting words and attest two similes.
I still need to work on having more similes and Interesting words.


“ Happy Birthday  Rayne!” I said. Today my baby cousin was turning one. I couldn't believe that he was turning one already. I was outside my Aunt's house and our whole family came. It was the hottest day in the sun. When we came I saw amazing cool decorations hanging outside. I saw signs that said happy birthday. Rayne had heaps and heaps of presents.
About half an hour later it was time to have something to eat. I had chips,burgers,Apple juice  and some  little sausages. That was delicious I felt full. It was time for the games we  played pass or parcel It was dumb because I couldn’t get a turn that was boring I hated that. We had another game it’s this flour game you have to get some flour put a bowl on top then you have to put chocolate on top now I had to chop of some flour with a knife we all took turns. Smash! My cousin busted it so he had to eat I thought that was disgusting he did too some people were laughing I wasn’t I said “  Yuck “.


It’s time for  raynes birthday presents”said my Aunty Rozland. It was so exciting I really wanted to see what's inside of the presents. First there was a truck he could fit in the truck we got him that. The next present was a towel and rubber duck some little cars. There was a little motorbike I said “ that is cool.”
It was blue and red.

Finally It was cake time the cake looked delicious it was a chocolate cake with M&M’s on top with sprinkles and we put maltesers  one everyone said “ I want to eat that outstanding cake” we sang Happy birthday” Then everyone blew out the candle. It was time to go we all got goodie bags we all said ”Happy Birthday Rayne” Then we were all leaving.”bye Aunty Rozland” we said. I thought that was a amazing birthday I felt happy and tired. (The end).

1 comment:

  1. Hi Kohl-lee,
    My name is Brooke I enjoyed reading your recount writing. Also I like the way you grouped your ideas in paragraphs and how you used past & present tense.

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